IELTS Recent exam with a test-proven sample answer(6.5 above)_Writing Task2(Essay)

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Hello guys,

I'm writing to show you the essay example one of my students, named Susan, wrote on the actual test.

You'd better consider the four criteria I always point out.

This is the IELTS Writing Task2 Question.



<Recent Writing Task2 Question>

Nowadays, sports give a significant impact on students at school. Some people said they should have many chances to participate in physical activities. However, others claimed it is not that important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.


<Test-proven Sample Answer>




In recent times, a lot of concerns mount over whether sport takes a crucial part in children’s school life. Some people strongly agree with that, whereas others have a totally different point of view, as this essay will discuss.

 On one hand, children have a right to get educated not only in an academic aspect but also in physical development. Teachers should consider it important for children to develop their lives in a balanced way, which means physical activities with their friends at school can help them improve their social skills. Moreover, most children seem to enjoy numerous and various activities rather than crammed in a class for a long time to cover their assignments or take a high-level lecture all day long at that early age.

 On the other hand, it is understandable that their parents appear to have a number of concerns about their academic performance for better colleges or further study after graduation. In fact, especially South Korea set a great example on that issue, which is that almost every primary students are very likely to be forced to take at least one or two extra classes after school as the governmental statistic says. Each household has to pay over 500,000 per month since their child gets admission from their school because of extremely high competition for university. So, they are eager to help their children be prepared for the brutal competition on their path for future. 

In conclusion, I have a consensus on the argument that children have to get a balanced education at least at school so that they can enjoy their school life and childhood with their pupils in terms of their educational rights and preparation for their physical development.


Okay, 
This essay is 6.5 according to the four criteria: 

-Task Response: 7
-Coherence: 7
-Vocabulary: 6
-Grammar: 6

Thanks for reading! 
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Written by Christopher Choi



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